வியாழன், அக்டோபர் 14, 2010

Mirage

Camels treading on the sands of time

fleeting by a scene at a time.

Thinking there is a lot of fun

dreaming dreams of times to come.

Waiting for the oasis to near

having almost nothing to fear.

I can almost hear the stream

only to realize it is a dream.

There is a mirage we all follow

only to find that those dreams were hollow.

We shall hope that we find our oasis soon

even if it is only for a noon.

GFK

This is the first time I am writing my poem,comments welcome

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  1. இந்த கருத்து ஆசிரியரால் அகற்றப்பட்டது.

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  2. இந்த கருத்து ஆசிரியரால் அகற்றப்பட்டது.

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  3. Well done GFK..

    Deserts are normally compared with the pains of the life of suffering people.
    But your lyric brings out hopes and optimism.
    The content and format of the poem looks like from a creator who is writing for a long time.If this is really your first attempt it's MARVELOUS
    Congrats and keep writing
    My earlier comments are deleted as I mentioned MSK instead of GFK


    Chocks

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  4. Nice kavithai.
    This kavithai is a "oasis in the desert". There are so many kavignars in our batch, it is good to bring out the kavignars in all of us.
    Karaiyan.

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